aeas作文考试模拟题-例文-语法讲解

（1）写作要有格式，开头，中间，结尾时必不可少的。

（2）要满足规定字数的要求，一般来说，尽量字数多一些。

（3）论点要清晰，论理要有说服力。

【题目】
“When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

 

“luck has nothing to do with success.” Is that true? As far as I am concerned, luck actually plays a very important role in our life and sometimes even  becomes the key to success.

A very famous example is an ancient Chinese story based on real history called” Zhuge to have the aid of east wind”. Thousands of years ago, there were 3 kingdoms having wars on the continent. In order to defend kingdom Wu, the military adviser of kingdom Shu, Zhugeliang, came up with an idea to set the chained warships of kingdoms Wu on fire. But his trickwasn’t perfect. If there was no east wind by the next day, he could fail and millions of soldiers and people could die. Fortunately, the other day turned out to be a windy day and the east wind helped Shu managed to win this war. In this story, we can see how important luck is .

But in order to succeed, we should pay attention to hard work rather than luck. As an old saying goes “opportunities are for those who are well prepared ” . Depending all on luck will be meaningless and lead you to nothing. There is a Chinese fable story can be a good explanation. Once there was farmer who happened to see a rabbit crush into a tree and kill itself. The famer thought that things like this might happen again if he was lucky enough. So he started to wait by that tree everyday after at the expense of his corps in the field but had nothing run into the tree ever again. We may laugh and think the farmer is stupid, but the truth is sometimes some of us do things exactly like this .

[批注1] Luck is a key role in success,但在下一段要先有论述，why？之后是例子。不能用一个例子，说明一个事实或理论。
[批注2] to be successful, to后面不能接名词

[批注3]每一段要空一行

[批注4]这段与论点不符，应继续论述lucy的重要性

[批注5]一定要有结尾段。

其标志是：in conclusion； in short……….

 

题目：Some people believe that children are given too much free time.

They think that this time should be used to do more school work.

How do you think children should spend their free time?

 

有些人认为孩子有太多的空闲时间。他们认为这个时间应该用来做更多的学校工作。你认为孩子应该怎样度过他们的空闲时间?

 

Nowadays, more and more people believe that children have too much

time.（批注A1） In fact, they are not for Chinese students. （批注A2）As

a student, there’s no doubt that children should have enough time for rest for the following reasons.

 

First of all, children get much burden owing to homework and tests.

Everyday, they need to do the lots of homework and go over the knowledge which they learned. Some of them even don’t have relax（批注A3） and

enjoy the life. How poor they are!（批注A4）

 

Secondly, if they use all their spare time for studying, they will become unhealthier and unhealthier. They have to have spare

time to do some sports which are good for their health so that they can live and study better.（批注A5）

 

What’s more, when they have enough spare time, （批注A6）they can take part in some social activity. Children can get lots of

experience which they can’t get on class, such as conversation, making friends and so on. This kind of activities are very important

to the future of children.（需进一步阐述，例如：they can take part in some social activities and volunteer work. From these kinds of work, children can get lots of valuable experience and useful skills which they don’t learn in class, such as how to communicating with others, solving practical problems, helping others, etc.）Besides study, these kinds of experience also play an important part in their future development. )

 

All in all, free time is not only to help children rest, but also growup. （批注A7）

★ 高频形容词：

  1. 贫穷的：poor = needy = impoverished = poverty-stricken
  2. 积极的，好的：good = conducive = beneficial=advantageous
  3. 消极的，不良的：bad = detrimental = baneful =undesirable
  4. 明显的：obvious = apparent = evident =manifest
  5. 健康的: healthy = robust = sound = wholesome
  6. 惊人的：surprising = amazing = extraordinary = miraculous
  7. 美丽的：beautiful = attractive = gorgeous = eye-catching
  8. 有活力的：energetic = dynamic = vigourous =animated
  9. 引起：cause = trigger = endanger
  10. 解决：solve =resolve =address = tackle =cope with = deal with
  11. 拆除：destroy = tear down = knock down = eradicate
  12. 培养: develop = cultivate = foster = nurture
  13. 激发，鼓励：encourage = motivate = stimulate = spur
  14. 完成：complete = fulfill = accomplish= achieve
  15. 保留：keep = preserve = retain = hold10. 有害于：destroy = impair = undermine = jeopardize
  16. 减轻: ease = alleviate = relieve = lighten

 

★ 高频名词：

  1. 影响：influence= impact
  2. 污染：pollution = contamination
  3. 人类：human beings= mankind = humane race
  4. 青少年：young people = youngsters = youths = adolescents
  5. 优点：advantage = merits = superiority = virtue
  6. 责任： responsibility = obligation = duty = liability
  7. 职业： job = career = employment = profession
  8. 娱乐： enjoyment = pastimes = recreation= entertainment
  9. 努力：struggle for = aspire after = strive for = spare no efforts for
  10. 从事： embark on = take up = set about = go in for

★ 高频同义词

1、解决：solve, resolve, deal with, cope with, handle, tackle

2、消除：get rid of, eradicate, eliminate

3、依赖：rely on, depend on, count on

4、十分：very much, immensely, hugely, largely, greatly, enormously, tremendously

5、损害：damage, hurt, injure, harm, impair

6、给予：give, offer, render, impart, provide

7、发展：develop, cultivate, foster

8、优势：advantage, merit, virtue, benefit, upside, strength

9、缺陷：disadvantage, detect, demerit, drawback,

 

十四．重要句型

  1. It was not until midnight that he finished his task.
  2. Not until he came back from abroad was I able to see him again.
  3. The harder you work, the greater progress you will make.
  4. He walked around the house, gun in hand.
  5. May you be in good health!
  6. Wish you a pleasant journey back home!
  7. The professor was a humorous man with big nose and deep-set eyes.
  8. What surprised me most was his imagination and patience.
  9. He lay on the grass, with his eyes looking at the sky and his hands under his head.
  10. Sitting under the tree are Mr. Green and his first teacher.
  11. On the wall hang two pictures of famous scientists.
  12. Looking back upon those past years, he couldn’t help feeling very proud.
  13. No sooner(Hardly) had he arrived at the theatre than(when) the play started.
  14. Young as he is, he has learned advanced mathematics.
  15. How I regret the hours wasted in the woods and fields!
  16. There stands a beautiful vase in the corner of the room.
  17. Ten miles north of the town lies a paper factory.
  18. There goes the bell.
  19. Nowhere has the world ever seen such a bird as here.
  20. It is no use crying for help.
  21. If only I had been your student in the middle school!
  22. It is believed that such a thing will not happen again.
  23. Only when he explained did I realize the reason for this.
  24. “He works particularly hard.” “So he does, and so do you.”
  25. Not only Alice but also Jane and Mary are tired of having one examination after another.
  26. Such was Albert Einstein, a simple person of great achievements.

 

aeas写作常见语法错误归纳

【不一致】

所谓不一致不光指主谓不一致，还包括了数的不一致、时态不一致以及代词不一致等。比如：When one have money, he can do what he want to。

分析：one是第三人称单数，因此本句的have应改为has; want应改为wants, 本句是典型的主谓不一致。

改为：When one has money, he can do what he wants (to do)。
【修饰语错位】

英语与汉语不同，同一个修饰语置于句子不同的位置，句子的含义可能引起变化。对于这一点考生们往往没有引起足够的重视，因而造成了不必要的误解。比如：I believe I can do it well and I will better know the world outside the campus。

分析：better位置不当，应置于句末。
【句子不完整】

在口语中，交际双方可借助手势语气上下文等，不完整的句子完全可以被理解。可是书面语就不同了，句子结构不完整会令意思表达不清，这种情况常常在主句写完以后，作者又想加些补充说明时发生。比如：There are many ways to know the society. For example by TV, radio, newspaper and so on。

分析：本句后半部分”For example by TV, radio, newspaper and so on。”不是一个完整的句子，仅为一些不连贯的词语，不能独立成句。

改为：There are many ways to know society, for example, by TV, radio, and newspaper。
【悬垂修饰语】

所谓悬垂修饰语是指句首的短语与后面句子的逻辑关系混乱不清。比如：At the age of ten, my grandfather died. 这句中”at the age of ten”只写出十岁时，但没有说明“谁”十岁时，按一般推理不可能是my grandfather, 如果我们把这个悬垂修饰语改得明确一点，读者或考官在读句子时就不会误解了。

改为：When I was ten, my grandfather died。
【词性误用】

“词性误用”常表现为：介词当动词用；形容词当副词用；名词当动词用等。比如：None can negative the importance of money。

分析：negative系形容词，误作动词。

改为：None can deny the importance of money。
【指代不清】

指代不清主要讲的是代词与被指代的人或物关系不清，或者先后所用的代词不一致。比如：Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid。

读完上面这一句话，读者无法明确地判断两位姑娘中谁将结婚，谁将当伴娘。如果我们把易于引起误解的代词所指代的对象加以明确，意思就一目了然了。这个句子可改为：Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid。
【不间断句子】

这个错误的出现受中文意识的影响很大。很多考生在写句子时，句子之间缺乏有效的连接成分。甚至，有的句子写的比较中式化。比如：There are many ways we get to know the outside world。

分析：这个句子包含了两层完整的意思：“there are many ways”以及“we get to know the outside world”。简单地把它们连在一起就不妥当了。

改为：There are many ways for us to learn about the outside world. 或：There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world。
【措词毛病】

学生在写作中没有养成良好的推敲，斟酌句子中所选用词的习惯。大部分考生随心所欲，拿来就用，所以作文中用词不当的错误随处可见。比如：The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution。

分析：显然，考生把obstacles“障碍”，“障碍物”误作substance“物质”了。另外“the increasing use(不断增加的使用)”应改为“abusive use(滥用)”。

改为：The abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution。
【累赘】

写句子没有一个多余的词；写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组；能用词组的不用从句或句子。比如：In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him。

本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同谓语从句，我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”可以改为：In spite of his laziness, I like him。

比如：For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need。

整个句子可以大大简化为：Diligent people use money only to buy what they need。
【不连贯】

不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语，或是结构上不畅通，这也是考生常犯的毛病。比如：The fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth。

分析：the fresh water与逗号后的it不连贯，it与things在数方面不一致。