2017年雅思7/8分写作到底差在哪里?之2017年母素材短语整理
1.你真的有效完成了雅思写作任务吗?
典型症状
背 “模板”、搬“范文”,张冠李戴,文不对题;
开头冗长“凑字数”,言之无物;
通篇内容空洞,没有按照题目要求进行描述和归纳(小作文)或论述(大作文)。
主要病因
也许是受到中文写作思维惯性的影响,许多小伙伴习惯性的在文章的开篇堆叠各种华丽词句,但读起来会发现大段文字绕来绕去却并没有进入主题,又或是因为过分迷恋依赖“模板”、“范文”内的格式和句型,却忽略了考试题目中实际的要求而导致说“废话”。大家有没有发现中文里这种由大及小、由远及近的迂回做法常导致观点不清晰,而英文采用直线型切题的写作方式,开门见山很重要,把最重要的观点放在最前面,然后辅助以数据、论据等,这样可以确保在有限的篇幅和时间内完成沟通的交流目的。
二是不能准确领悟题目的要求,导致写作起来不切题,也就无从“完成写作任务”。
仔细阅读雅思官方评分标准写作部分,小作文要求“能否有效地找到信息中关键的内容并对之进行描述和写作”,考的是描述能力。在短短的150字左右的篇幅内,想要把图表内的每个信息都进行描述是不可能、也是不必要的,关键的是要把这些信息分组,然后挑出最重要的信息(比如最高的、最低的等)突出表述,最后进行归纳总结、简述趋势。
就大作文来说,主要考察“论点是否切中题目的要求、论证过程是否完整、论点是否得到了论据的支持;观点是否清晰和有效”,考的是论述能力。其实,任何考试作文题考的都是写作能力,而不是考你的观点有多么正确。正所谓“论之有据”,中文写作如此,英文写作也不例外,但中国烤鸭往往落入费尽心思挖论点的误区,而忽略了使用论据来证明自己的论点。此外,要把观点表述得“清晰有效”也很考功夫。英文写作中注重言简意赅,特别是在篇幅有限的考试写作的环境下,更需要大家将自己的观点提纲挈领地表述出来,并通过使用主题句(每段的开头或结尾)或者是标志性词汇(如“thefirst/second/…/last reason is”等)来清晰明了地指示出自己的观点。
对症下药
此外,平时多进行英文阅读,重点可以看看两类文章,一是经济类的,看看人家是如何把数据进行分组、对比、归纳的,二是观点性的,学习人家如何呈现和分析观点。最关键的是不要光看就算,要做有心人,把文章中实用性的句式、词汇、表达方法摘抄下来,这样才能日后为我所用。
在考试的时候不要吝惜分析题目的时间,花5分钟好好看清题目要求,把握好“写作任务”到底是什么—特别是大作文,把文章稍作计划再开始下笔,这样会达到事半功倍的效果。
2.缺乏连贯性、逻辑混乱
典型症状
东一句,西一句,句子之间没有关联;分段能力欠缺,不能把一个主题或观点的内容集中在一个段落;很少使用关联词、标志性词汇,组织比较松散。
主要病因
在考试时间的压力下,许多小伙伴都匆忙下笔,想到哪儿写到哪儿,导致整个文章结构松散,即便是字字珠玑,但也让阅读者很难找到句与句之间、段落与段落之间的逻辑关系,读起来费尽,那么通过写作达到交流的目的也就无从谈起。
中文里很少或几乎不用形式连接手段,只是将句与句排列起来,依赖语义让读者去了解其内在关系,所以中国烤鸭的文章常给人以条例不清的印象。英文写作则注重语句之间的连贯性和逻辑关联,其表现形式就是使用关联词、标志性词汇,它们是把散落的珍珠串起来的细线。现在小伙伴们逐渐注意到了这个方面,不过偏向集中在段落之间(如使用“first/ second/…”等),但在句际、句内的逻辑关系连接尚比较缺乏,只是简单地套用中文句法,句际句内用逗号而非关系词连接,导致句法出错而被扣分。
对症下药
雅思写作讲究一定的格式和规范,注重理清写作的思路要从平时练起,建议大家在平时练习的时候不要光注重写,也要注重分析自己的文章—回过头来看看有没有哪些句子可以重组、哪些地方需要加上关联词/标志性词汇来加强连贯性。
在考试的时候,下笔之前应该先计划一下写作思路,花点时间把文章的架构搭好:如有很多信息点(小作文)或观点(大作文),一定要好好归纳一下,形成最重要的三四个,然后安排次序—先写/论什么、再写/论什么…,依此类推,这样下笔之后不至于杂乱无章。
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第一类:教育类
1 Secure a good future for sb.
2 Experience working and living with sb.
3 The whole variety of backgrounds from a wider society
4 A certain amount of
5 Provide a clear and objective measure of…
6 Motivate sb to work harder
7 Test the ability to do…
8 Be relevant to
9 Prepare sb for later careers/working life after school
10 Develop all round culture
11 Develop aspects of young people’s personalities
12 Make informed decisions
13 Have access to (all the latest medical research)
14 Go against religious beliefs
15 Adults who are in employment
16 In a stimulating way
17 Be part of the digital generation
18 Suffer from the lack of technological skills
19 Impersonal technology
20 A lifetime of unskilled work in a factory
21 Have many temptations
22 In an apprenticeship scheme
23 Vocational training
24 Not Join gangs and spend time on socially acceptable activities
25 Get drunk or paint graffiti
26 Poor discipline at school
27 The increased use of drugs and alcohol among young people
28 Lose control under the influence of alcohol and commit crimes
29 Be better informed about…
30 Show remorse for
31 Become hardened criminals,career criminal
32 Schools and other educational establishments
33 Have a natural authority over
第二类:环境类
34 Slow down the rate of global warning and air pollution
35 Other major problems,such as intensive farming, overpopulation, the hole in the ozone 36 36 layer or water pollution
37 Place the emphasis on
38 People of all ages
39 Educate sb. About sth.
40 Improve the reliability of public transport
41 Reduce the level of traffic in inner-city areas
42 Do more research into
43 Greater international cooperation
44 Less fortunate countries
第三类:科技类
45 Convenient and instant
46 On a daily basis
47 Become so addicted to the online social networks
48 The whole of society
49 A small proportion of
50 Problems, such as population control, elimination of diseases like cholera, global waning and food shortages
第四类:职场类
51 People in medical and educational professions
52 Receive the largest financial rewards
53 Live in the age of mass media
54 In comparison with
55 Working conditions
56 Be significantly improved
57 A shortage of labour
58 Voluntary sector
59 Have little sense of social responsibility
60 Understand the culture and policies of the company better
61 Competition from the job market
62 High levels of unemployment
63 Meet the performance targets
64 In the interest of
第五类:公众设施类
65 The world’s population
66 Within the past century
67 Suffer regular famine and droughts
68 Genetically modified crops
69 Labour intensive
70 Conditions in factory farms
71 Organic food
72 Concerns about the lack of research into…
73 Affect…for the worse
74 Free access to the man in the street
75 Enjoy works of art
76 Levy a charge
77 Charge an entrance fee
78 Other priorities for public money
79 update exhibitions and make new purchases
80 A great sense of community to life
81 Appropriate facilities for modern-day living
82 Supermarket or modern cinema complexes that cater for the demands of the twenty-first century
83 Be preserved for prosperity
84 In the Internet age
85 Have access to
86 Films with exciting special effects and high production values
87 Object to
88 Build the arenas and modernise the infrastructure
89 Cater for
90 Provide direct support for the population
91 The honor and prestige
92 Be transformed into
第六类:社会类
93 Offer us an alternative and more spiritual outlook
94 The clinical world of science
95 Encourage the habit of self-reflection
96 Pay bus drivers and other ancillary staff
97 Maintain the transport infrastructure
98 Deprive sb of…
99 Exhaust emission
100 Abolish fares
第七类:食品健康类
101 A connection between what people know about nutrition and their eating habits
102 Have a varied diet
103 Sit down to a proper meal
104 Make a difference to…
105 Television commercials, simple flyers
106 Be profoundly influenced by
107 Make purchase
108 Be protected from too much exposure to…
第八类:全球化
109 The leading cause of global warming and climate change
110 Lead a greener lifestyle
111 Weaken traditional communities
112 Weaken national culture and traditions
113 Adopt aspects of the lifestyles of the American characters
114 Share habits, products, services
115 Reduce prejudice against
116 The resident population
117 Short-sighted view
118 A wide range of goods and services
119 Promote the nation’s cultural heritage
120A risk of insufficient funding for maintenance of important buildings