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2017雅思大作文锦集,雅思作文总是上不了7 8!到底差在哪呢? 考官模拟题加范文!

对于大部分烤鸭来说,最难对付的部分应该是写作了。懒癌发作的时候看单词都无力,竟然还要写!!据考官透露考生需要完全理解Task2部分的问题是什么然后在文章里回答准确。

写作里常见的三大类问题。

1、写作task2部分出现率较高的问题,就是先阐述现象, 然后让你去讨论并且解决这个问题。
For example:
Pollution in cities is an increasing problem today. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
这样的题目就很清晰地把需要写明的部分列出来了:
出现的原因+解决的方法。

2、一个话题给出两个截然相反的观点,然后让要童鞋们来选一个自己赞同的。
此时不仅要写明支持的观点,也要列出为什么支持这个观点。
千万注意,也有给出两个相似观点的情况,这个时候就会要求两个观点都分析。

An example might be:
Globalisation allows trade and the spread of technology between countries, but it also means that national traditions and customs are lost forever. To what extent do you agree with the above?
在这个例子里,如果你只是在文章里谈及globalisation(全球化)带来的好处和坏处,那么根本就木有回答题目的问题。
你必须更深一步地明确表示你是完全支持or反对globalisation这件事情,而且要写清楚为神马支持。
或者你也可以采取先抑后扬的手段~说明在globalisation这个过程中,某些地方自己还是支持的,但是超级反对另外的部分。
不管你用什么方式去列你的outline,都要在文章里明确自己的观点然后阐述为什么自己是这样认为的。

3、Tast2中还有一种范围比较广的题目,就是自由列观点。
这个时候你可以选择第1项那种思路去明确自己更赞同某一方的观点,也可以阐述优劣并给出原因。
同学们先把题目中的给出的两种相反的观点分别进行讨论和给出原因,最后给出自己的观点,或在讨论的过程中就给出自己的看法。
An example of this kind of question is:
Nowadays, many students decide to go abroad to study in a foreign university. While there are a lot of benefits in doing this, there are also some drawbacks. What are the main advantages and disadvantages to studying abroad?

在回答这个问题的时候,你需要有一个清晰的结构:
1)出国留学(课程)的好处
2)出国留学的弊端
很多同学就是按着这个结构分别先写出一大段好处和一大段弊端。这样是OK的,不过,想想看你写作答题卡那些可怜的考官们,这样的结构每天都要看好几千份好不好。。。。而且,想要拿高分,必然也要来点儿花样啊。
所以,建议大家可以把结构变得有趣一些:讨论同一个方面的观点里,先列出好处再列出弊端。

比如:
“One advantage to going to a foreign country to study is that the student will learn a new language. […] However, it takes a great deal of time and money to get your language level up to the required standard…”
总的来说,在真正理解考题里的问题以后,你必须在文章里明确地写出你的观点,然后给出支撑这个观点的有力论述,在谈及每一点的原因时,也需要用到大量的例子。
很多同学也很容易忘记这一点:准确回答题目中的问题,需要用大量的相关论点和例子。

下面给大家一个考官的范文,请烤鸭们根据上面的讲解做参考,看看考官们是怎么来写文章的!

题目:
Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

范文:

It is true that online courses are becoming a common feature of university education. Although there are some drawbacks of Internet-based learning, I would argue that there are far more benefits.
The main drawback of the trend towards online university courses is that there is less direct interaction. Students may not have the opportunity to engage face-to-face with their teachers, and will instead have to rely on written forms of communication. Similarly, students who study online do not come into direct contact with each other, and this could have a negative impact on peer support, discussion and exchange of ideas. For example, whereas students on traditional courses can attend seminars and even discuss their subjects over coffee after lessons, online learners are restricted to chatting through website forum areas. These leaners may also lack the motivation and element of competition that face-to-face group work brings.
Despite the negatives mentioned above, I believe that online university courses are a positive development for various reasons. Firstly, they allow learners to study in a flexible way, meaning that they can work whenever and wherever is convenient, and they can cover the material at their own pace. Secondly, the cost of a university education can be greatly reduced, while revenues for institutions may increase as more students can be taught. Finally, online learning offers open access to anybody who is willing to study, regardless of age, location, ability and background. For example, my uncle, who is 65 years old, has recently enrolled on an online MBA course in a different country, which would have been impossible in the days before Internet-based education.
In conclusion, while I recognise the possible disadvantages of online learning, I consider it to be a positive development overall.


考官判高分的点:
考官判断一篇好的Task2作文的标准是:Coherence 逻辑性 and Cohesion紧密性。
‘Coherence’逻辑性指的是文章的逻辑是不是正确的。
论述不同观点的时候有没有分段?
每段是不是层层递进的?
每段写出的信息是不是关联性较强的?
每段的句首是不是直接列出了本段的观点?
……

这些都是考官给高分的点。
文章的‘Cohesion’紧密性也是考察的重点。
直白地说,第一点就是句子和句子之间的连接词是否用得恰当。
比如‘however’, ‘in addition’, ‘because’, ‘as a result’……这类词是需要出现的,但也不宜用得过多,不然文章会显得硬生生的。
然后呢,考官还会看一个句子中是否恰当地用了代词。
“用词多样性”也是考官给高分的评判标准。
考官需要在你的文章里看到大量的同义替换 synonym,烤鸭们在学习单词的时候,不仅要学会单词的本身,还要多记忆和该单词相关的各种搭配组合collocation。
所谓搭配记忆法,就是再学习一个新单词的事实,不仅要记住这个单词,还要记住和它相关的固定搭配和用法。
语法是不是正确应该是各位童鞋最担心的了,所以想拿高分就得精准。
可惜很多小盆友们写完作文如果还有时间,顶多硬着头皮check第二遍。。。连语法正确都悬。。何况精准。。。
就算是这样,想拿高分的童鞋千万好不要放过这部分,好好check完再交卷。
看看写完的作文里,Tense 时态是否正确, 特别要注意在一个完整的句子里,时态有没有保持一致。

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