艾易艾斯aeas写作（十八）情绪的表达

在作文里，对情绪的刻画对学生们来说是一个难题。大部分的学生并没有特别地去思考不同情绪的区别，以及它们的来源。所以，很多时候，学生们对情绪的表达只限于简单的 I am happy. This is terrible. 等等。这是不足够的。在作文里表达情绪，我们可以遵循一个原则：Show, don’t tell.

 “ I was so paranoid. ” 我有点偏执狂。

 “ I found it hard to sleep at night. I had nightmares. Before going to bed, I would make sure the door and the windows of my room were securely and tightly shut…. Then I went back to bed and closed my eyes, but having drunk so much water I soon had to get up again to urinate. And since I was up I would check all the locks. ”

 

晚上我睡不着觉，老作噩梦。临睡前，我要确保所有的门窗都关好了，然后我才上床闭上眼睛。但喝了太多的水，我很快又要起身上厕所。 而每次起来，我又忍不住把所有的门窗再检查一遍。

 

请比较以上两段话，哪一段更好地表现出主人公偏执狂的特点呢？

这就是 Show, don’t tell.

 

那么，我们都能从哪几个方面来进行对情绪的刻画呢？

常见的有：physical signals, internal sensation, mental response,

比如以冷为例子，它的外在表现( physical signals )有:

Physical Signals:

 

Shivering

Blue lips

Yawning

Eyes that tear up

Chattering teeth

Tingling extremities

Stuttering speech

Skin that’s uncomfortably cold to the touch

Dry, cracked lips

A stiff jaw that makes speech difficult

Numbness in one’s extremities

A burning sensation in the skin

Clumsiness

Slow, shallow breaths

Lips that tremble

Poor dexterity or increased clumsiness

Wrapping the arms around the torso

Jumping, shuffling, or dancing to get the blood flowing

Clapping one’s hands or stamping one’s feet

Shoving the hands deep into the pockets

Red and swollen patches on the skin (chilblains)

Pulling the limbs tightly into the core

Slurred speech

Rubbing one’s hands together

Tucking one’s hands into one’s armpits

Pulling a collar or scarf up over the face