艾易艾斯(aeas) 写作范文欣赏 (九)实用文体(7-12)
本期写作范文欣赏要跟各位家长和学生分享艾易艾斯(aeas)写作中的实用文体写作. 在艾易艾斯(aeas)7-9 和10-12年级组的考试中不时出现实用文体的写作，例如写电邮给政府部门或者银行等。邮件等实用文体是一种功能性文体，所以需要学生在的写作时使用正确的格式、恰当的语气，以及准确利落的词汇和表达，并且能把上述语言要素应用起来达到有效、准确的交流目的。
Topic: Write a letter to a bank asking for a loan for the small business that your family is running.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I’m writing on behalf of my parents to request a loan from your bank to expand our cheese making business.
My family has been in this business for over 20 years, and we have quite a good reputation in the industry. It is a very profitable business because my parents have created a unique recipe for making cheese, which has a rich and special flavour and better than most types of cheese on the supermarket shelves. Over these years, most of our clients are major supermarkets in Victoria, and this guarantees that our products can sell to a large number of consumers. You can expect that the sale of our cheese is quite stable as well.
However, the last two years have seen a significant growth of our business beyond Victoria. Our robust sale grows significantly since last year, which is a clear evidence of our ability to repay the loan. Orders from both local and overseas companies doubled this year. These companies have expressed
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their interest in doing long-term business with us. Thus my parents view this as the optimal timing for expanding our business. With new manufacturing equipment, we expect that our production will be doubled and can efficiently meet large volume of orders in the future. This will largely increase our profits and enable us to repay the loan.
The expansion is our reason to seek for a loan is that our business needs to expand to meet the increasing sales. Specifically, we need to borrow $200,000 to purchase new manufacturing equipment, and we expect that we can repay the money over the period of five years.
We hope you will give our application favorable consideration and we hope to hear from you soon.
With regards, Kevin Hans
教师点评:考场分数 16-18 分
- 这篇文章首先做到了实用文体的正确格式要求，文章段落中信息 的先后顺序安排从目的到自我介绍，到表达贷款原因, 再到最后 且最重要的还款能力，作者层层推荐，达到了清晰的沟通表达的 目的。
- 文章的写作口吻以及选词正式，符合文体的要求。词汇选用恰到 好处，语法准确。